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3DX Diss Track Vol. 1


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Intro: Yo, who these people think they fooling, fam? Like really, they on here chasing each other on the beach to have sex, my dude? Like who does that, yo...yo..check me out..

 

(( Beat Drops ))

 

I'm a monster when it comes to addressing the horror

Call it bad karma on those who didn't honor the god when I was authentic in my honest persona

Now I got that loaded neena ready for anything they offer

Like this barbie who floods rooms with an ad to come chase a chick on the beach like that's proper

Yo,

I'm a grown man, I don't play games for the sex

I come to the chick and let her know what I want with respect

I give her the kiss to the neck and she start giggling and shit

We go to the Home #1 and we naked on the bed and shit

 

But nah, we got grown ups who want to go to the beach

Make a game where they running around chasing each other like how we was before we was teens

Like, they the type to suggest 3DX to give us the ability to climb on trees

I'm like, what type of life do you have that got you wanting to play hide and go seek

On a game that's really adult oriented, shit ain't making sense to me

 

What adults you know is at the park chasing each other just on casual outdoor fun time

Nah, adults on they grind trying to punch that clock on time

Work them hours so they can get home and sip that wine

Log on to 3DX and chat with some like minds

And if they lucky? they might have some cyber sex that makes them cum

And then it's good night

 

Fucking right I said it, and made a rhyme about it

Dare you to come and comment like you got something to say about it

It's open forums and it says " speak your mind " so I'm gone speak about it

In lyrical format so you can see I'm bout it

Bout what?

Lyrical word play on your worst day I'd run circles around you leaving you dumb founded on your bed lay

 

Time on my hands so I watch what I type

Get it?

I'm lying cause if I did I wouldn't have been banned from the Forums twice

I'm just that nice

Potent with the words that I write

Make people itch in they skin organ like they rest with bed bugs at night

But for " you people " it's more like lice

 

My melanin got me feeling like the devil among angels yet they think they posing a threat

Like how a dude from the block more BDSM then the majority of you pale necks?

Like how a dude from the block spitting hot shit but would accept a " cold " quick

Yet watch how you salt shakers get mad off something so harmless

I'm like, yo, let me cold them and then out talk them

Let me send the cold invite to then ignite the brain waves and show them that just because I cold you

Don't mean I won't actually talk and make your pussy walls fold, boo

 

Peep the message, the blessing is in disguise

While these white guys scared to lie with some white thighs of a white girl cause they think it's really another white guy

Projecting how they really got a white lie within em for not liking the white guys

And won't come out the closet to allow they laundry to dry

So they stinking with insecure mildew funk but get on World Chat to cry

Like dude, get a grip, there's real women OFFLINE

 

How you on a sex game complaining about any thing

We got people claiming to be cheese burgers and Troll Kings

Listen, I got a mac that'll go click clack like a belt buckle

And when I aim it at your dome? call it a cat scan

Cause these cats think they can speak they mind and not get in trouble

 

B-d-d-d-d-at!!

 

(( drops the mic ))

 

 

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I appreciate the effort, but this is...all kinds of not good. Lol.

 

[Disclaimer: please don't take offense to this reply. I'm not trying to attack you or belittle you in any capacity. It's just that I've been rapping for many years and I thought you might find some use for a bit of constructive criticism.]

 

First of all, there's no consistency of rhythm to your lines. You have some lines that have few syllables (which would fit into one bar nicely, as they should), and then you have others that are such mouthfuls that you'd have to deliver them with machine-gun speed just to get them out before the bar finishes, which would not have the kind of percussive rhythm that makes rapping sound interesting. If you performed this, it would sound incredibly disjointed, it would be totally lacking in flow, because some lines would have a slow, slick cadence to them while others would sound rushed and frantic, disrupting the vibe.

 

Next, let's talk about rhyme. You can (and really should) rhyme more than just the last word of any given line. When you bounce on a certain rhyme for several lines, it sounds cool. Try swapping out some of the words you wrote with others that are more phonetically similar to the word you're trying to rhyme. You have to think of your voice and your words as a percussion instrument, because that's the foundation of what makes rap incredible.

 

Here's a simple example of what I mean:

 

(Compare this:)

Take a slut to the back room, tell her to suck my dick

Blast my hot load all over her giant sexy tits

 

(To this:)

Snatch a thick bitch n get her to lick my stiff dick

Ecstatic laughter while I blast my jizz onto them massive tits

 

It just makes your lyrics flow more naturally.

 

You should also try to use less generic rhyming words. It's okay to keep it simple sometimes, but it comes across as amateurish if used too frequently. Things like "dry / guy / cry" is just...eh.

 

Also, try not to rhyme "shit" with "shit." Lol.

 

There are some good concepts here, though, just try improving it some. Hope this helped a bit. 

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I appreciate the effort, but this is...all kinds of not good. Lol.

 

[Disclaimer: please don't take offense to this reply. I'm not trying to attack you or belittle you in any capacity. It's just that I've been rapping for many years and I thought you might find some use for a bit of constructive criticism.]

 

First of all, there's no consistency of rhythm to your lines. You have some lines that have few syllables (which would fit into one bar nicely, as they should), and then you have others that are such mouthfuls that you'd have to deliver them with machine-gun speed just to get them out before the bar finishes, which would not have the kind of percussive rhythm that makes rapping sound interesting. If you performed this, it would sound incredibly disjointed, it would be totally lacking in flow, because some lines would have a slow, slick cadence to them while others would sound rushed and frantic, disrupting the vibe.

 

Next, let's talk about rhyme. You can (and really should) rhyme more than just the last word of any given line. When you bounce on a certain rhyme for several lines, it sounds cool. Try swapping out some of the words you wrote with others that are more phonetically similar to the word you're trying to rhyme. You have to think of your voice and your words as a percussion instrument, because that's the foundation of what makes rap incredible.

 

Here's a simple example of what I mean:

 

(Compare this:)

Take a slut to the back room, tell her to suck my dick

Blast my hot load all over her giant sexy tits

 

(To this:)

Snatch a thick bitch n get her to lick my stiff dick

Ecstatic laughter while I blast my jizz onto them massive tits

 

It just makes your lyrics flow more naturally.

 

You should also try to use less generic rhyming words. It's okay to keep it simple sometimes, but it comes across as amateurish if used too frequently. Things like "dry / guy / cry" is just...eh.

 

Also, try not to rhyme "shit" with "shit." Lol.

 

There are some good concepts here, though, just try improving it some. Hope this helped a bit. 

 

Oh so you mean something like..

 

This dude think he can tell me how to freestyle on keyboards?

I been " rapping " since before Yagi could afford those keys, boy

I'm a student to the game of Lyrics from the spiritual invoice

From " with in " I spit " shit " that make your face go in boy

 

I know the context and many 3DX users not really Hip to the Hop, boy

But you Hopped on My Hip so you about to feel this Glock, boy

You like to be technical with your rhymes, I shoot it straight from the knot, boy

I talk to you, while you study to try sound like a professional bee bop decoy

I deploy

and destroy

any so called connoisseur of my verbal acrobatics

vernacular mathematics that leave you simply humbled and ashmatic

you thought you had constructive criticism for a wizard of such acrobatics

That involve syllables, similes, and metaphors with speedometer tact gadgets, look

 

I spit for real, son

Don't think I don't rhyme this quick

Switch up the flow so slick, I'd leave you stuck in your mix

You a DJ, so I expect you to know bout this

How to cut the track and switch it up at the flip of switch

 

But you thought you knew what you was talking about... 

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Blim to tha blams 

I wack ya in da jams with deez quick hands

no needs fo da spams coz ah dont eat da hams 

did i ruin ya plans oh I'm saaweee tell another stooory

Dont be colding or holding on to ya dreams boi

aint no playing with dis toy

so move yaself along

bangin onya gong 

and singing ya same ole song

eet all went so wrong

like Cheech n chong

so flips ya big one

and I'm on da attak

so stop ya Yak

Ya BigMac

 

Yo Yo Yo Allie in Da house yaaaaaaaaaaaawll   

 

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Blim to tha blams 

I wack ya in da jams with deez quick hands

no needs fo da spams coz ah dont eat da hams 

did i ruin ya plans oh I'm saaweee tell another stooory

Dont be colding or holding on to ya dreams boi

aint no playing with dis toy

so move yaself along

bangin onya gong 

and singing ya same ole song

eet all went so wrong

like Cheech n chong

so flips ya big one

and I'm on da attak

so stop ya Yak

Ya BigMac

 

Yo Yo Yo Allie in Da house yaaaaaaaaaaaawll   attachicon.gifSoopa Allie Awaaaaaaay!.jpg

 

BARS!!

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got me a fleet of cheeky space goats / always armed with giant dildos, set to obliterate foes / you bout as valuable as a penny and a Faygo / non-stoppin' shit-talkin, no wonder you get the shade thrown / i smoke the dro before expressin thoughts, you could say i paint slow / but that don't mean i'm strained, bro, i just ride a strange flow / there's a piece of me in every color of the rainbow / i've transcended body and spirit. clearly we're not in the same boat / don't be a bitch, boy / i got super saiyan fists, boy / you provokin this bloke like you desperate to suck his dick, boy / not one for competition, not from kids with awful diction / think you hot shit? you nuclear waste, toxic dipshit / left the shadows just to knock a fuckin name right off my hit list / katana to the neck, cackling, carving you into split bits / did you expect a puppy? man, i'm a crackhead rhinoceros / i know exactly what the fuck i am, fuck ya damn hypothesis

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