sandraxo Posted September 5, 2016 Share Posted September 5, 2016 (edited) This is our first erotic comic. The idea was borrowed Send us your comments! I hope that is not so bad for a start. https://3dxchat.com/ref/kjak Edited January 26, 2021 by sandraxo Nastypazo, Jules Winnfield, SkyDiver and 11 others 14 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gizmo Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 Welldone! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sandraxo Posted September 6, 2016 Author Share Posted September 6, 2016 Thank you, but please tell me if something is not good. The next one should be better...so, every wellintentioned criticism is welcome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jules Winnfield Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 Awesome work...others try to shine with making stupid porn photos and put them on a website *coughramrodcough* but you really write a story behind. Respect. I would like to see some RP in the future (police...whatever). You are on a really good way. Thank you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sandraxo Posted September 6, 2016 Author Share Posted September 6, 2016 Thank"s I'll do the best I can .But I owe a lot to my dear Marko for help....love you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Malvasiah Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 As you ask to be told what is not good and you have only got praise so far, I will tell you my honest opinion. The story and the characters are as boring and predictable as in 95% of all porn. When I read it I knew exactly what would happen on the next page. On the positive side I would say that on the graphic side you did a good job. Rochi 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SkyDiver Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 As you ask to be told what is not good and you have only got praise so far, I will tell you my honest opinion.The story and the characters are as boring and predictable as in 95% of all porn. When I read it I knew exactly what would happen on the next page. that is cos you seen every porn there is you perv! for some one who is new to erotic art(yes i'm calling it that) this will look really good.graphics looks good,really good, picture story succession also very good ^^ a few tips - if you would make edges around the pictures thinner and pictures a little more bigger it will give you more space to write a story, which you can use like Deadpool style - breaking the 4th wall, talking with reader directly or just to express more feelings ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cordelia Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 Well done!I appreciate anyone who goes to the trouble of putting something like this together.I know how hard it is. My little cartoon strip is hard enough to do and the black & white image remains the same all the time and you have over 70 images to deal with.The only thing I would say, as I am guessing that English isn't your first language, is get someone to proofread it before you publish. I never correct anyone's English in game or the forum but, with something like this, I think you should. It doesn't matter too much with the slang terminology but the normal speech does.Keep going Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sandraxo Posted September 6, 2016 Author Share Posted September 6, 2016 Malvasiah,Thank you for being honest. I know that the story is predictable.As I wrote, the story is borrowed ...I don't know if I'll be able to write a porn story that will be much interesting .... maybe something with unexpected end. I'll do my best.For the first comic, for me was more important the look of complete comic.... . I'll do probably one more comic by someone else's idea ....and than, maybe the third one ....complete my comic....pictures and story. Cordelia,Thank you so much....English is not my native language. It is very difficult to work in a foreign language. Of course we'll try to find someone to help me with that in future.Anyone who wants to help is welcome. The biggest problem for now ....it's hard to find someone to "pose" for pictures...But every beginning is difficult. Thank's to all.....your compliments and criticisms will help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sandraxo Posted September 6, 2016 Author Share Posted September 6, 2016 that is cos you seen every porn there is you perv! for some one who is new to erotic art(yes i'm calling it that) this will look really good.graphics looks good,really good, picture story succession also very good ^^ a few tips - if you would make edges around the pictures thinner and pictures a little more bigger it will give you more space to write a story, which you can use like Deadpool style - breaking the 4th wall, talking with reader directly or just to express more feelings ^^ Thank's ....I'm glad someone like you think so about my "work".... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bennet Posted September 6, 2016 Share Posted September 6, 2016 Nothing wrong with borrowing a story, all laid out really well. The English is great if you want someone to sound like its their second language, just like it would be if chatted up by someone like that in RL. But if you want them to sound like English is their first language you will need editing. Look forward to any more you do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sandraxo Posted September 7, 2016 Author Share Posted September 7, 2016 I need two actors for the next comic....One white and one black guy .... If you are interested, send me a message. TY Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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